Can anyone help me to rephrase this paragraph
Jake-a-saur
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Sunday, 8th of August 2010 04:09:11 PM
Well, I am a bad writer. Can anyone help me to cut this para down to 50 Jake-a-saur words and make it nicer?
Most of you may know the story of Registered User Easter Island. The island was covered by forests before it was destroyed. Joined: Saturday, 15th of May 2010, 21:14:14 The islanders cut down every single tree in order to build those famous Posts: 1469 stone statues. Because of this, the ecosystem collapsed, and all of the Viewed 6200 times species extinct, including human-beings themselves. They couldn’t even
build a boat to escape from that island because they had nothing left to
build one.
Marshmellow
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Monday, 9th of August 2010 03:05:42 AM
Many people may already know the story of Easter Island. It Marshmellow was once strewn with lush forests before the islanders cleared it away to Registered User construct the famous moai statues. As a result, the ecosystem, animality Joined: Wednesday, 5th of May 2010, 00:37:12 and humanity were all crippled, rendering the island inhabitable due to Posts: 1534 lack of resources. Viewed 11208 times
PS: I am very wordy. but I never got less than an A on any English paper.
its been a while!
49 words in this one!
love bunny
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Tuesday, 10th of August 2010 03:29:11 PM
Many of you may know the story of Easter Island. What was once love bunny covered by endless forests now lays in ruin. Its inhabitants cut down the Registered User trees in order to build stone statues that would stand through time. Joined: Thursday, 29th of April 2010, 20:24:49 However the result was devastating. The ecosystem collapsed, & all of the Posts: 978 native species became extinct; & without so much as a single timber left to Viewed 9142 times construct a boat, so was the fate of its inhabitants.
I like the first post very well worded & informative.
I went for more of a story summarization as if a narrator was describing
it.
Corn Fritter
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Wednesday, 11th of August 2010 11:20:14 AM
You probably know the story of Easter Island, about how it was Corn Fritter covered in forests before the ecosystem collapsed. The islanders had used Registered User all the trees to build the famous stone statues called Moai, and because Joined: Tuesday, 27th of April 2010, 01:10:38 of that all the creature on the island died. Including the humans. They Posts: 104 didnt even have any materials left to escape on a boat. Viewed 8678 times
hope i helped
pookie
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Thursday, 12th of August 2010 09:11:13 PM
Easter Island was covered by forests. The islanders cut down pookie all the trees in order to build the famous statues. This caused the Registered User ecosystem to collapse and the animals died, even including humans. They Joined: Tuesday, 27th of April 2010, 13:13:36 couldn't leave because they used up all the resources. Posts: 955 Viewed 7421 times this good??
cuteness
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Friday, 13th of August 2010 12:22:15 PM
When Easter Island was completely deforested by its inhabitants cuteness because they wanted to build stone statues, the ecosystem collapsed and all Registered User species died out. Joined: Monday, 31st of May 2010, 20:40:00 Posts: 1041 This included humans, who were unable to build a boat to escape because Viewed 8764 times all trees had already been cut down.
MOo
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Saturday, 14th of August 2010 10:53:49 PM
Many of you may know the story of Easter Island. The island MOo was covered by forests, but the islanders cut down every single tree in Registered User order to build those famous stone statues of heads. Deforestation caused Joined: Friday, 30th of April 2010, 03:43:40 the ecosystem to collapse, & all animal species on the island to go Posts: 690 extinct, including the humans. They couldn't even build boats to escape Viewed 13211 times from the island because, having cut down all the trees, they had no
materials to build one.
In a regular school paper, you aren't supposed to talk to ur audience as
'you', the way you do in the first sentence. In that case you'd say 'Many
people know the story of Easter Island'. If you are reading the paper
aloud to the class, or it is a speech or something, then you can say 'many
of you'.
BABLU
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Sunday, 15th of August 2010 09:04:58 AM
The story of Easter Island, once a mystery, is a tragic example BABLU of cultural & ecological collapse. The island was once flourished with Registered User forests & unique species of plants. Unfortunately, its inhabitants poorly Joined: Monday, 17th of May 2010, 16:50:45 utilized these resources, & by using a superfluous amount of wood without Posts: 1585 considering the concept of limited resource, the ecosystem became Viewed 8669 times unbalanced, & quickly destroyed. A most famous example is the great,
stone statues the islanders used so much resources & energy to erect.
However, with all of the necessary resources depleted, vital species to
their survival, plants & animals alike, began to dissipate - including
themselves. Without enough wood to build boats, they unknowingly trapped
their hopes of survival into certain extinction.
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